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My heart is shattered
you left it at my feet
I gave it to you so willingly
and now you have left
giving no doubts of your feelings

I told you i loved you
and you laughed in my face
as if you are too good for me
as if it was ridiculous
and you didn't care

As you walked away
I counted the steps in my head
for shall i remember
that day
the day I took my life

My body may have died that day
but not my soul
or my heart
for they were never mine to have
they were always yours
and will always be yours

In death
I live on
through the love I gave
not only to you
but to everyone I met

I will live on
not only for you
for its not all about you
your not who i am
you do not define who I am

I love you
if I can't be with you
I will loose a part of me
would I ever get it back
if I had the strength
to live without you

Am I really alive
my heart is all I had
but it is no more
thats how I now realize
that I am no more

I will always love you
and watch over you from up here
©2008-2009 ~ironcrosswolf
:iconironcrosswolf:

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:icongreen--faerie:
Very nice sentiment, and nice language. You're good at poetry - but my suggestion is try to use a few less-cliche phrases. The shattered heart itself is an imagery used hundreds of times over if not thousands.
This is your personal work, so it only really matters that you like it, but that's my suggestion :3
Keep it up!
:iconconstellationcat:
Thanks. For saying something like that.

So much.
Thank you.
:iconsecretladyspider:
that is poetically suicidal. :hug:

--
"I want you to know that no matter what happens, you will always be my little sis... and that you are as bright as a blazing sun... You have the potential for anything... Just believe..."

-A dear friend
:iconmaryhadalittlelamb:
It's really good... sad but good!

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